(Intro)Nowadays, as a part of learning language in the society has been becoming important to improve job prospects or to enhance comunication skills in general. - Paraphrasing/ Grammar Nowadays, learning a language can have several benefits, particularly in terms of employment opportunities and the way we communicate with others. , (Intro) Nowadays, learn and be able to understand and speak different languages make the difference in global society, specially in job prospects and communication skills. - Paraphrasing/ Grammar Nowadays, learning and being able to understand and speak different languages makes a difference in global society, specially in the areas of employment and communication., (Body 1) On the one hand, international jobs needed English language or others. While communication allow companies to stay connected and work online. They also have access to... - Connectors/ Sentence structure Firstly, one reason is multilingual employees are preferred by international companies because communication allows them to stay connected and conduct business online. , (Body 1) Moreover, it is known that those who are fluent in a second language have higher salaries than those who are not fluent. - Overgeneralizing Not ALL speakers of a second language get higher salaries ...........may get higher salaries., (Body 1, 2) On one hand/ In one hand/ In another hand - Inappropriate/ Incorrect Linker On the one hand- On the other hand.....but, this task is different to the model, which was about effects +/-. This task requires REASONS ; therefore, linkers such as Firstly/ Secondly/ One reason is/ A second reason is...are appropriate to use., (Body 2) Furthermore, your social's skills should receive a big uppgrade, improving the ability of talking with another people. Wich is a massive barrier for some people nowadays. - Word Choice/ Formality/ Sentence Structure Furthermore, social skills can be strengthened, improving the ability to talk with other people, which is a significant barrier for some., (Body 2 Topic Sentence) Secontly, when this skills are worked by people, it is an advantage at the moment to look a job. - Unclear Topic Sentence) Secondly, a person may learn a foreign language to improve their employment outlook., (Conclusion) Indeed a new language will build cultural diversity, but it will be easier if it exists a general language to support that. - Punctuation/ Word order/ ' a General' Language isn't necessarily what the task is about. Indeed, a new language will build cultural diversity, but it would be easier if a general language to support that existed., BEGGINING / REQUERIMENTS / NETWORWING / COMPANIE / AMBICIOUSLY - Spelling! BEGINNING / REQUIREMENTS / NETWORKING / COMPANY/ COMPANIES / AMBITIOUSLY , other language / a huge chance / the importance to be accurate / get immersed to a new world - Word Choice/ Collocation another language / a big opportunity / the importance of being accurate / get immersed in / ,

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