Although coffee gives you energy, it can ruin your sleep. → Now use: However, Coffee gives you energy. However, it can ruin your sleep., We know very little about women's sleep because researchers excluded them from studies.→ Now use: As a result, Researchers excluded women from studies. As a result, we know very little about women's sleep., Even though I know screens are bad for sleep, I still scroll through my phone every night.→ Now use: Nevertheless, I know screens are bad for sleep. Nevertheless, I still scroll through my phone every night., Women not only carry the mental load, but also experience hormonal changes.→ Now use: Additionally, Women carry the mental load. Additionally, they experience hormonal changes., Since the mental load keeps your brain active, sleep quality suffers.→ Now use: Consequently, The mental load keeps your brain active. Consequently, sleep quality suffers., We've been asking "Do women need more sleep?" when we should be asking "Why do women get worse sleep?"→ Now use: In other words, We've been asking the wrong question. In other words, it's not about needing more sleep — it's about why women get worse sleep., To begin with, we need better research. In addition, we need to take tiredness seriously. Lastly, we need to protect our sleep.→ Now use: First of all... Secondly... Finally, > First of all, we need better research. Secondly, we need to take tiredness seriously. Finally, we need to protect our sleep..

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