Did the writer paraphrase the question in the introduction?, Yes – “International sporting events…” restates the topic in different words, Did the writer clearly say agree or disagree?, Yes – “I largely agree…” shows a clear position, Is the opinion clear or neutral?, Clear – not neutral, but balanced, Did the writer mention both sides of the topic?, Yes – mentions benefits + limits, Is there a thesis statement (main idea of the essay)?, Yes – sport helps but not a full solution, First paragraph: What is the main point (P) of this paragraph?, Sport promotes unity and reduces differences between countries, Does the writer explain (E) how sport helps people from different countries?, Yes – explains shared rules and peaceful interaction, What example is used (E)?, World Cup example – countries with strained relations compete peacefully, Does the example clearly support the main idea?, Yes – clearly supports unity idea, Does the paragraph stay focused on one idea only?, Yes – only focuses on unity/global understanding, 2nd paragraph What is the main point (P) of this paragraph?, Sport gives a safe way to express national pride, Does the writer explain why this is positive?, Yes – explains emotional expression without conflict, What is the example used?, Competition replaces political/military conflict, Does this paragraph introduce a new idea or repeat paragraph 1?, New idea – shifts from unity → emotional outlet, Does the writer stay on topic (national pride / controlled environment)?, Yes – stays focused on controlled expression of pride, 3rd paragraph Does the writer disagree slightly or fully agree?, Slightly disagree – accepts limits of sport, What is the main counter-argument?, Sport cannot solve deep/root political problems, Does the writer give an example of a negative situation?, Yes – violence and protests at events, Does the writer still keep their overall opinion consistent?, Yes – still agrees overall despite limitations, Conclusion Does the writer repeat their opinion?, Yes – restates “not a complete solution but valuable role”, Is the conclusion a copy of the introduction?, No – paraphrased, not copied, Does the writer summarize the main ideas briefly?, Yes – unity + expression + limits, Does the writer give any new ideas in the conclusion? (they shouldn’t), No – no new ideas introduced, Can you find a sentence that clearly shows the writer’s position?, “I largely agree with this view…”, How many main ideas are in the essay? (too many or controlled?), 2 main ideas (unity + pride) + 1 counter-argument, Is the essay easy to follow? Why?, Yes – logical structure, clear progression, easy to follow

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