(Intro) ** not paraphrased!!** The two maps depict how the town of Hillingford changed between 2000 and 2015., (Intro) ** appreciate is the wrong word** According to the maps, Hillingford underwent various changes over the fifteen-year period, 2000 to 2015., (Overall) ** too vague! 'modified' is the wrong word** Overall, the town of Hillingford saw considerable changes in the west, with building development taking the place of woods and fields, whereas the eastern and southern parts saw fewer changes., (Overall) **where is the main difference? This is necessary. Wrong tense!** The south area remained generally unchanged, unlike the west, which saw considerable development., (Body) ** language/ tenses** In 2015, this north-western area saw a new hotel construction, south of which new houses were also built., (Body) ** language** Over the period, the shops and cafe remained, whereas..., (Body) ** language** A train station was built in the north east corner where vacant land lay. , (General) ** Grammar/ Vocabulary** In addition/ Moreover/ Furthermore // There are not many differences...// an empty area...//,

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